Patricia Polacco
Patricia Polacco has a very productive life. She was born on July 11,1944 in Lansing, Michigan. She moved three times.Until the age of three she lived on a farm with her grandparents. At the age of seven she moved to Oakland, California because her parents divorced. Now she lives in Coral Gables, Florida. I feel sad because she left her friends behind.
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Wai and Keoua: Topic sentence is not who she is. You say to much about where she lives. Details support topic.
Kalin:Glow: I like how you used good vocabulary. For example "Productive"
Grow: You need more because. For example why did she move three times and when?
Patricia Polacco has a very productive life. She was born on July 11,1944 in Lansing, Michigan. She moved three times.Until the age of three she lived on a farm with her grandparents. At the age of seven she moved to Oakland, California because her parents divorced. Now she lives in Coral Gables, Florida. I feel sad because she left her friends behind.
Briana and Kiana: Glow-We think you guys did a good job and it has lots of details!! Grows-We think you guys need to write more about who she is and what she does!!!!!!! Write more information!!!!
Micah and Mckenna:Glows-Great job on explaining where she moved. Grows-We think that you should have a ! to make stand out.
Kanoa and kaui: glow- I liked how you expailed where she was born grow-Maybe you guys should make it more specific. for example you should put more detailed words.
Wai and Keoua: Topic sentence is not who she is. You say to much about where she lives. Details support topic.
Kalin:Glow: I like how you used good vocabulary. For example "Productive"
Grow: You need more because. For example why did she move three times and when?